“Wasted” indeed, wow. Nice body, but her eyes make her look a drug addict. The way she’s holding her arm doesn’t help, either. That’s what junkies do when they are jonesing. Also, not to nitpick but since we typically fix minor typos there are two here. “thanks god” should be “thank God” and “process better” is grammatically awkward. Shouldn’t it be “better process”?
All that being said, please don’t take my comments as criticism. I like the submission as a whole. It tells a good story, and the woman is attractive (if dishelved and a tad sketchy looking), too.
I got stripped by the court for my third texting while driving offense. I’m okay with that, but I’m supposed to play Peter Pan for the Youth Theater. There’s no way I can convince anyone I’m a boy dressed like this.
“Wasted” indeed, wow. Nice body, but her eyes make her look a drug addict. The way she’s holding her arm doesn’t help, either. That’s what junkies do when they are jonesing. Also, not to nitpick but since we typically fix minor typos there are two here. “thanks god” should be “thank God” and “process better” is grammatically awkward. Shouldn’t it be “better process”?
All that being said, please don’t take my comments as criticism. I like the submission as a whole. It tells a good story, and the woman is attractive (if dishelved and a tad sketchy looking), too.
I got stripped by the court for my third texting while driving offense. I’m okay with that, but I’m supposed to play Peter Pan for the Youth Theater. There’s no way I can convince anyone I’m a boy dressed like this.